LE Reflection Blog

       Today was the day we were graded on our document and site. Some of the problems I had was the amount of pronouns used in my paragraphs. In most of my paragraph there were multiple times when I used we, I , and us and that was the main thing that put my grades lower. Another thing I would like to improve is the bio under our picture. The advice that Mr. Paterson gave us was to talk about the qualifications that we have to make us valid to give this statements. One thing that is in my current bio is that I have lived in America for most of my life. But this was not enough as just living there was not enough to say that I can say anything. That is why in the revised version I would like to add the fact that I have been to over 10 different school over my life and so I know the small improvements that school make to make the life easier for the students. The last thing I was told to improve or change was the use of some words in the paragraph. For example I used t...

Today was the last day to finish the brochure and essay. One thing we had to rush on was the website because we were so caught up in the essay that we were not able to get our hands on the website. The AWL and RL were also really hard because we had to force our paragraph into sounding hard and high level but I thought that took away the creativity we had in our writing. For example, one of my group members wanted to make a high leveled sentence so they used the word developed in the sentence multiple. Times. Consequently, because the word developed was hackneyed even though it was higher in level it was forced and was not a sentence that was enjoyable.

The main focus of this day was to finish the conclusion. The first conclusion we wrote was only about 5 sentences long and we noticed that it had nothing that the teacher said we had to have in it. So we took few days to fix the structure of the paragraph. Like it was said in class, we started with a summary of the ideas we had and choose our best ones to summarize. Doing this made the paragraph really long so it was hard to keep it in the sentence limits. One thing I didn't understand to well was the difference between the summary and conclusion. 

On this day we continued writing our essay. The focus of the day was to finish our body paragraph. Some things we tried to fix were the use of pronouns. In our paragraphs we had a lot of pronouns including we, i, and you and so we tried to eliminate those as much as possible. The process we took to get rid of all the pronouns was to find them and replace them with better words that don't have pronouns in them. One thing that was hard was trying to find words to replace them and when I was able to replace it it was hard to find new words and not the words we already used for the other replacements.